文章不好看，有涂鸦，影响美观。

单词间隔不匀称，要控制一下。标题两词均需大写，宜居中。

My family is very good. 句子没啥毛病，表达自己的意思，值得鼓励。

My mother and father and my brothe is in the family. 单词brothe拼写有误。本句学生想要表达的可能是：我的妈妈和爸爸，还有我的哥哥都在家里。但这不太符合我们在这个情景里的说话习惯。可以这样说：There are four people in my family. They are my mother and father, my brother and I.

There be句型在英语中是很常用的，学生在这里还不太会用。当学生善用there be句型时，他/她的头脑里就开始萌发英语思维了。要让学生多做这方面的造句练习。

Coco is in my family, too. 借用课本上的句子，没毛病。

I love Coco, it is cute. 可改为两句：I love Coco. It is very cute.

Coco the color is black. 要表达Coco的颜色是黑色的，可以直接说Coco is black. 或者Coco's color is black.

My mother and father love me, too. I love my family. 从涂改的痕迹看出，她本来把后一句写在前面的，所以带了个too。后来做了改动，too也该换换位置。

总体上看，这个学生是不错的。她努力用自己所掌握的语言技能去表达自己的想法，虽然有些错误，但基本上把意思说出来了。 她的作文可修正如下：

My family is very good. There are four people in my family. They are my father and mother, my brother and I. Coco is in my family, too. I love coco. It is very cute. Coco is black. My mother and father love me. I love my family, too.